วันจันทร์ที่ 10 ตุลาคม พ.ศ. 2554
Identity
Identity is the way that we stand to ourselves. The way we think that we are happy about what we have. I sometimes experience identity when I saw someone have something better than me (not to mention names) but I realized that what I already have is already good so I think that identity is really happen that it stop us from something that is bad that reminds me that I'm happy what I have.
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ตอบลบJudging from you're amount of writing and quality, I doubt that you worked hard on this. First of all, it was too short, the required amount of writing is 3 paragraphs which theres a great amount of variety of topics on identity you could choose from. Secondly, you should reread what you wrote because from my first glance, I could see some punctuation and grammar mistakes for example "Identity is the way that we stand to ourselves. The way we think that we are happy about what we have", you should change it too "Identity is the way that we stand to ourselves, it is also the way we think that we are happy about what we have" which makes it easier and less confusing to the reader. Thirdly, you could seriously do a much better work on this, I know you and you're abilities well. You should always aim higher than your expectations which will lead to you're success and achievements. Finally, I recommend you to rewrite this piece of writing and try your best. I know you could do it and don't be afraid to reach higher.
ตอบลบDisregarding your writing, the header and wallpaper is also lacking design. The things you should do is to create a collage in picnik and then choose a wallpaper you like. It is not a hard task and everyone could do it, so do you. After you made you're changes, it will definitely bring more people to you're blog, make it more interesting and of course, for all the people in our class to learn more about you.
ตอบลบNow, Tiger makes a point about putting some effort into your blog, in both the design and writing aspects. The "identity" assignment was to write 3 paragraphs, not three sentences. And what happened to the colorful header you worked on in class? You are a colorful guy, I know you can add more excitement to this page! Are you willing to try?
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